“Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.”
“It would be impossible to say what horrors were embedded in the minds of the children who lived through the day of the bombing in Hiroshima. On the surface, their recollections, months after the disaster, were of an exhilarating adventure. Toshio Nakamura, who was ten at the time of the bombing, was soon able to talk freely, even gaily, about the experience, and a few weeks before the anniversary he wrote the following matter-of-fact essay for his teacher at Nobori-cho Primary School: “The day before the bomb, I went for a swim. I was knocked to little sister’s sleeping place. When we were saved, I could only see as far as the tram. My mother and I started to pack our things. The neighbors were walking around burned and bleeding. Hataya-san told me to run away with her. I said I wanted to wait for my mother. We went to the park. A whirlwind came. At night a gas tank burned and I saw the reflection in the river. We stayed in the park one night. Next day I went to Taiko Bridge and met my girl friends Kikuki and Murakami. They were looking for their mothers. But Kikuki’s mother was wounded and Murakami’s mother, also was dead.”” (Hiroshima, p.90)
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This paragraph can be divided into two paragraph.Then the first paragraph would be "It would be impossible to say what horrors were embedded in the minds of the children who lived through the day of the bombing in Hiroshima. On the surface, their recollections, months after the disaster, were of an exhilarating adventure." And the second paragraph would be "Toshio Nakamura, who was....wounded and Murakami’s mother, also was dead.” This is possible because the first part of the paragraph is talking about common facts but the second part is talking about Toshio Nakamura when she suffered bombing attack in her early age.
In this paragraph I only can see two smaller paragraphs. The first one starts at the beginning of the paragraph and finishes in “were of an exhilarating adventure.” Here the author goes from the idea of what children should be thinking at that moment to an individual example which is Toshio’s experience. In Thoshio’s example we can divided the paragraph and here we would create the second smaller paragraph.
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