“Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.”
“It would be impossible to say what horrors were embedded in the minds of the children who lived through the day of the bombing in Hiroshima. On the surface, their recollections, months after the disaster, were of an exhilarating adventure. Toshio Nakamura, who was ten at the time of the bombing, was soon able to talk freely, even gaily, about the experience, and a few weeks before the anniversary he wrote the following matter-of-fact essay for his teacher at Nobori-cho Primary School: “The day before the bomb, I went for a swim. I was knocked to little sister’s sleeping place. When we were saved, I could only see as far as the tram. My mother and I started to pack our things. The neighbors were walking around burned and bleeding. Hataya-san told me to run away with her. I said I wanted to wait for my mother. We went to the park. A whirlwind came. At night a gas tank burned and I saw the reflection in the river. We stayed in the park one night. Next day I went to Taiko Bridge and met my girl friends Kikuki and Murakami. They were looking for their mothers. But Kikuki’s mother was wounded and Murakami’s mother, also was dead.”” (Hiroshima, p.90)
Saturday, June 30, 2007
Assignment #11(A)
“Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.”
"The hospitals and aid stations around Hiroshima were so crowded in the first weeks after the bombing, and their staffs were so variable, depending on their health and on the unpredictable arrival of outside help, that patients had to be constantly shifted from place to place. Miss Sasaki, who had already been moved three times, twice by ship, was taken at the end of August to an engineering school, also at Hatsukaichi. Because her leg did not improve but swelled more and more, the doctors at the school bound it with crude splints and took her by car, on September 9th, to the Red Cross Hospital in Hiroshima. This was the first chance she had had to look at the ruins of Hiroshima; the last time she had been carried through the city’s streets, she had been hovering on the edge of unconsciousness. Even though the wreckage had been described to her, and amazed her, and there was something she noticed about it that particularly gave her the creeps. Over everything－up through of the wreckage of the city, in gutters, along the riverbanks, tangled among tiles and tin roofing, climbing on charred tree trunks－was a blanket of fresh, vivid, lush, optimistic green; the verdancy rose even from the foundations of ruined houses. Weeds already hid the ashes, and wild flowers were in bloom among the city’s bones. The bomb had not only left the underground organs of plants intact; it had stimulated them. Everywhere were bluets and Spanish bayonets, goosefoot, morning glories and day lilies, the hairy-fruited bean, purslane and clotbur and sesame and panic grass and feverfew. Especially in a circle at the center, sickle senna grew in extraordinary regeneration, not only standing among the charred remnants of the same plant but pushing up in new places, among bricks and through cracks in the asphalt. It actually seemed as if a load of sickle-senna seed had been dropped along with the bomb." (Hiroshima, p.69-70)
"The hospitals and aid stations around Hiroshima were so crowded in the first weeks after the bombing, and their staffs were so variable, depending on their health and on the unpredictable arrival of outside help, that patients had to be constantly shifted from place to place. Miss Sasaki, who had already been moved three times, twice by ship, was taken at the end of August to an engineering school, also at Hatsukaichi. Because her leg did not improve but swelled more and more, the doctors at the school bound it with crude splints and took her by car, on September 9th, to the Red Cross Hospital in Hiroshima. This was the first chance she had had to look at the ruins of Hiroshima; the last time she had been carried through the city’s streets, she had been hovering on the edge of unconsciousness. Even though the wreckage had been described to her, and amazed her, and there was something she noticed about it that particularly gave her the creeps. Over everything－up through of the wreckage of the city, in gutters, along the riverbanks, tangled among tiles and tin roofing, climbing on charred tree trunks－was a blanket of fresh, vivid, lush, optimistic green; the verdancy rose even from the foundations of ruined houses. Weeds already hid the ashes, and wild flowers were in bloom among the city’s bones. The bomb had not only left the underground organs of plants intact; it had stimulated them. Everywhere were bluets and Spanish bayonets, goosefoot, morning glories and day lilies, the hairy-fruited bean, purslane and clotbur and sesame and panic grass and feverfew. Especially in a circle at the center, sickle senna grew in extraordinary regeneration, not only standing among the charred remnants of the same plant but pushing up in new places, among bricks and through cracks in the asphalt. It actually seemed as if a load of sickle-senna seed had been dropped along with the bomb." (Hiroshima, p.69-70)
Tuesday, June 19, 2007
Assignment 10 (C) - Help
4. Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:
The Inuit would put a small piece of feather over the hole and stand with bone harpoon ready and when the seal came into the hole the air pushing ahead of its body would ruffle the feather and the hunter would lunge with the harpoon and bury the barbed head in the back of the seal.
Why do three different verb forms in this passage occur with “would”? What does the use of “would” convey here?
Origin answer:
It describes the ways that the Inuit usually do because it means “possible” but not they must do that.
The Inuit would put a small piece of feather over the hole and stand with bone harpoon ready and when the seal came into the hole the air pushing ahead of its body would ruffle the feather and the hunter would lunge with the harpoon and bury the barbed head in the back of the seal.
Why do three different verb forms in this passage occur with “would”? What does the use of “would” convey here?
Origin answer:
It describes the ways that the Inuit usually do because it means “possible” but not they must do that.
Assignment 10 (B)
8. Consider this sentence from Brian’s Hunt:
He had the bow, a laminate straight, almost a longbow, that pulled forty-five pounds at twenty-six inches’ draw.
In this case, what is “draw” and what does “pounds” refer to here?
Origin answer:
“draw” is the distance that the arrow can go and “pounds” refers the longbow what Brian has.
Revision:
“draw” refers to the string with a pulling movement and the “pounds” refers to the weight of power when Brian pulled the bow.
He had the bow, a laminate straight, almost a longbow, that pulled forty-five pounds at twenty-six inches’ draw.
In this case, what is “draw” and what does “pounds” refer to here?
Origin answer:
“draw” is the distance that the arrow can go and “pounds” refers the longbow what Brian has.
Revision:
“draw” refers to the string with a pulling movement and the “pounds” refers to the weight of power when Brian pulled the bow.
Assignment 10 (A)
3. Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:
A coyote, perhaps, brush wolf as they called them up north, or maybe a timber Wolf, two wolves, one begging from the other.
What is the sentence type here, and why?
Origon answer:
This is a simple sentence because it has only one independent clause. The subject is “they” and the verb is “called” in this sentence.
Revision:
This sentence is not a complete complex sentence because it doesn’t have any independent clause but it has a dependent clause, “as they called them up north.” The subject is “they” and the verb is “called.” “as” is a subordinator.
A coyote, perhaps, brush wolf as they called them up north, or maybe a timber Wolf, two wolves, one begging from the other.
What is the sentence type here, and why?
Origon answer:
This is a simple sentence because it has only one independent clause. The subject is “they” and the verb is “called” in this sentence.
Revision:
This sentence is not a complete complex sentence because it doesn’t have any independent clause but it has a dependent clause, “as they called them up north.” The subject is “they” and the verb is “called.” “as” is a subordinator.
Monday, June 18, 2007
Assignment #9 (B)
"On his way back with the water, he got lost on a detour around a fallen tree, and as looking for his way through the woods, he heard a voice ask from the underbruch, 'Have you anything to drink?' He saw a uniform. Thinking there was just one soldier, he approached with the water. When he had penetrated the bushes, he saw there were about twenty men, and they were all in exactly the same nightmarich state: their faces were wholly burned, their eyesockets were hollow, the fluid from their melted eyes had run down their cheeks." (P.51)
I don't understand why there are many soldiers in the woods?
I don't understand why there are many soldiers in the woods?
Assignment #9 (A)
"Father Kleinsorge put a piece of cloth over Father Schiffer's eyes, so that the feeble man would not think he was going crazy." (P.39)
I don't understand what thing Father Schiffer thinks he was going crazy and Father Kleinsorge need to cover Father Schiffer's eyes?
I don't understand what thing Father Schiffer thinks he was going crazy and Father Kleinsorge need to cover Father Schiffer's eyes?
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